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She always watched them from the background. All those talented mages, who knew how to cast spells without any problems. She's been part of the Circle of Magi since she was seven years old, and yet, even 10 years later, she was no better than those who had come only two years ago. It was true that there had been no magic in her family before her, but that shouldn't be an issue.
Why did she have to watch them jealously? That tiny little elf, always Irving's favourite with amazing talents in elemental and spirit magic. Anders, who always ran away and barely attended any lessons, yet he was more talented in healing than any of the apprentices. Even Jowan was better than her.
Not that she ever complained. Selnim Lonus was an elf taken from the poverty of the Alienage in Denerim. So, in almost every way, living in the Circle Tower was better for her than anything else that could have happened to her. But she was not happy. Selnim lived in fear both in the tower and back when she had been in the Alienage. While in Denerim it had been illness and hunger that could have ended her life, amongst the mages, it is the templars and demons she has to fear. Other apprentices who came with her have already passed their Harrowing or were highly praised by Enchanters. Selnim, on the other hand, was the cause of constant worry.
With her magic, she was a source of danger to the people around her. But she saw no future for herself.

Even during the night, she felt like she was losing herself.

"Why in such a hurry, dear? Go to sleep, let me build you the world of your dreams."

Sweet words tempted her through her dreams.

"I can grant you your greatest desire…"

She was offered all she wanted.

"With my help, you can become a powerful mage."

But she was afraid. Afraid of saying yes. Afraid of agreeing. Afraid of dying…
She lived in fear.
Selnim had no friends, no loved ones.
She had no future.

But one thing she could do. And that was, to make a decision to save herself from her doom.
And so, she cut herself off from her fears… She lost her dreams…
But she did not mind it anymore.

Because she had saved herself.

And she could not feel regret anymore.
Selnim Lonus was content.
Walking amongst mages and Templars without any emotions of jealousy or fear.

Walking amongst them as a Tranquil.
This is my entry for The Dragon Age Original Character Competition.
I can't draw, so I go for the literature.
Word count: 424 excluding title

Completely made up character, with mention of my OC (Sylverin Surana) and a few other characters.

Is it a good choice to become a Tranquil? Sometimes, yes.

Millions of thanks to :iconflyte9393: who was my Beta Reader yet again and corrected all my stupid grammatical mistakes ^^;
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:iconleonar-cousland:
Leonar-Cousland Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
Awww...I feel bad for her.
Makes me wish I could do something for her.
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Rowlina Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Student Writer
You might get a chance :XD: She'll be in BaM ^^ Though... only temporarily ^^;
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:iconleonar-cousland:
Leonar-Cousland Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Temporarily?
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:iconrowlina:
Rowlina Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Writer
Well, she is not a party companion. She'll only be there for 1 or 2 chapters
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:iconleonar-cousland:
Leonar-Cousland Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
Um...I'm still confused.
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:iconrowlina:
Rowlina Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Writer
When Sylverin returns to the Circle Selnim will be in those few chapters, but will be left there as she is only a tranquil
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hueynomure Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
_ poor thing
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:iconioik:
Ioik Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012
Oh my goodness. This is brilliant. You hinted but didn't give the ending away throughout. It was a surprise but one that made complete sense. Poor girl.
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:iconrowlina:
Rowlina Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. (And thanks for the fave as well)
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Ioik Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
=D
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Wirls Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012
Wow, so sad... But I suppose she found peace in the end...
Interesting to see this from the point of view of someone who chose to be made Tranquil.
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:iconrowlina:
Rowlina Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012  Student Writer
I thought people would like this topic ^^

It is sad in a way, but she is safe now.

Thanks for the comment :)
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:iconsoniacarreras:
SoniaCarreras Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's impressive. Love to see what would lead a young mage to accept the tranquility rite.
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:iconrowlina:
Rowlina Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah, I thought it was an interesting concept. People tend to think that becoming a tranquil is bad, so I kinda decided to think about it a bit more. There ARE mages who decide to be tranquils. And here is one ^^
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DemeterAnna Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
Darrrrrrrk~ I got dem shiverrrrrs~

I hope you'll win! It's a very brilliant piece <3
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:iconrowlina:
Rowlina Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
Yaaay, glad you like it ^^ :D
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:iconvictricia:
victricia Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yay brilliant! Thanks for participating! Would you mind adding the word count to the artist's note? :)
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:iconrowlina:
Rowlina Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
Done ^^
Wah, first time participating in a writing competition with Dragon Age stuff :XD: So excited :la:
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:iconvictricia:
victricia Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yay! I hope it goes well for everyone! :love:
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